Do you find this excerpt somewhat interesting?

Question by mimiangel: Do you find this excerpt somewhat interesting?
I wrote out of the blue. This excerpt isn't really much of an excerpt because it isn't part of a bigger story. I want to know if my writing is good, and I take criticism well. So please, I HATE the answers that go along the lines of this, "OMG I love your writing! It's so good! Can you write more?" Well, I would be flattered, but you need to state WHY it's good. You can say that, but after wards tell me WHY it is good so

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